Suzan Palumbo the yard goth. @sillysyntax.bsky.social

A man complained about the first sentence in my story Laughter Among the Trees: "The highway to the campground cuts through the granite Laurentian Plateau like a desiccated wound." Can a wound be desiccated he asked rhetorically. Why are all these words necessary. Me: Yes and because I said so.

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Emerence @damemyniah.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:13 UTC

I had a desiccated wound once, it was gross, & as someone familiar with the Canadian Shield yes it did look like a road cut.

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Blake @credit2mywife.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:21 UTC

Someone has never wounded an undead creature before and it shows. I mean, a vampire who just ate might have wet wounds, but that’s the exception. Little known fact: Mummies keep those compressed air cans around for papyrus cuts. True story.

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Neil Willcox Pretender To The Goblin Throne @neilwillcox.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 19:12 UTC

Absolutely pointless criticism when he could just put the sentence into that AI machine that makes stories simpl... [Neil is hauled away by several robots]

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Premee Mohamed @premeemohamed.com [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:09 UTC

WE'RE THE WRITER AND WE SAID SO WHAT OTHER REASON DO YOU NEED

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JRho @jrho.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:35 UTC

I would say this is the kind of thing to complain about to the group chat, but I doubt that many people are willing to converse with this man

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Mattie Lewis @devilsdoorbell.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 18:14 UTC

this reader does not have the heart of a goth or a poet that’s for sure. That opener felt like a promise that what I was about to read was gonna be good, to me

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gochenourabout @sjgochenour.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:11 UTC

I am made wildly anxious by how willing people are to broadcast their inability to engage with all but the most literal texts. The image is perfect, I know exactly what you mean, and also . . . wounds can definitely be desiccated???

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Radiant Fracture @radiantfracture.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 04, 2024 at 01:08 UTC

If the rocks are blue then the shadows will look slightly gold

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E. Catherine Tobler @ect.bsky.social [ View ] Jul 03, 2024 at 17:23 UTC

That man can get into the sun.

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